ENGL 298 B: Intermediate Writing Social Sciences   Autumn 2011, University of Washington

MP 2.2 I like my introduction and how I plan out what I’m going to talk about in it, but if you have advise on improving it I’d love to hear it. The first body paragraph is a general summary of what I’ll put in the final draft, and I’ll be adding quotes and details […]

Rough Draft   I’d like the most review on how I can expand my counter-argument. I think I have a good grasp of why both governments exist, and I hope I did a decent job of laying that out here. I tried to give Hobbes a thorough, clear presentation of his argument for why his […]

  MP 2-1 Rough Draft This is my rough draft to the answer of second prompt: Why do government exist? This is the basic structure of my essay and I will be adding more “meat” to it once I receive feedback from my group at conference to tell if I am headed in the right […]

LYMANMP2       I chose the first prompt, about who should lead, how they should lead, and why they should lead. I definitely need some assistance with the why, as I am not sure I am being specific enough about that particular section. I also am completely struggling with a suitable conclusion. Everything I tried […]

2.2_NicoleHobble In my particular case, I would like to have feedback on my argument. I wasn’t completely sure if I had a clear argument or counterargument. I know that I have my ideas straight and where i’m going with this, I just want to make sure that it is on the right track. I’m not […]

Mp 2 Rough What I really am hoping to hear back on is if my essay is following all of the logical steps in order for my conclusion to be reached. First off, I need to know if the claim I am making is substantial enough at all – I feel like I am walking […]

Rob Oser_MP 2.2_Rough Draft For my paper I have questions about a few things.  First of all, I am not used to writing with sign posts, as seen in the introductory paragraph.  Do these work, spelling out what the paper will be about?  If they don’t how do you suggest I change it so I […]

MP2roughdraft This paper was definitely more difficult for me to write than the first major paper. I found it difficult to not take a stance on whether Locke or Hobbes was better and I had a hard time incorporating effective counterarguments. I chose to write on the first prompt as well so it was hard […]

So far I feel like my major paper is coming together pretty well, but it might be different for others who read it. I really need feedbacks to see if my paper is clear and understandable. I also feel like my counter argument is not strong enough. I think most of my ideas are pretty […]

cmc16_mp2   So, I’d like to start off by saying I will gladly take ANY criticism in any part of this draft. I’m not feeling very confident in this paper, for whatever reason I’ve been having a hard time connecting with the topic, so any help you could offer would be appreciated. However, the areas […]