ENGL 298 B: Intermediate Writing Social Sciences   Autumn 2011, University of Washington

MP 3 Rough Draft

I know that this draft still has a ways to go. I think my biggest place to improve upon would be specifics. I need a lot more concrete examples from the text. It was challenging for me to find lots of good examples which was slightly worrisome. I would also like suggestions on how to make the transitions better because as of now they are very poor and pretty much nonexistent. If any of you had difficulties with this concept at first I would also like to hear what they were so I might be able to add them to my paper if they happen to be different from mine. Thanks and see you all on Wednesday!