English 298 Major Paper 2.1 Rough Draft
Happy three day weekend everyone! First of all, I think I know where I am trying to go with my paper. A lot of my paper may be more of just thoughts, so I’ll need to revise the writing and make the paper more professional overall. I know it definitely needs work, but that’s why it’s just a rough draft. I need to revise my introduction and conclusion paragraph, and I’m thinking I’ll need to break up my paper and just go more into depth on each point in my final draft. I’m working on providng more evidence with quotes in the paper as well. Also, do you think I am focusing too much on either Hobbes or Locke? Also, I feel like it may be too apparent I am more in favor of Locke’s philosophy than that of Hobbes. I think the thesis of self-preservation may be a bit weak as well, so I’ll work on that as well. I am open for suggestions and constructive criticism, thanks!
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