ENGL 200 D: Reading Literature: Literature in the Marketplace

I really like your introduction paragraph; it gets right to your main point. I like the idea of your paper but it seems that it is a lot of summarization for some reason. I would suggest using Smith’s Theory of Moral Sentiments more to explain why Debra acts in a certain manner. When I was reading your paper I kept thinking about the society and the Debra as separates, but is Debra more of a product of her environment?

I think you can use Smith more widely throughout your paper rather than have one paragraph about Smith. Also, perhaps Debra is more of a product than an individual in the Bitchun Society since she is bringing something new to the society. I think you can go even further of how the Bitchun Society affects her considering she had Julius murdered to get what she wanted.

The way you parallel Debra and Julius is interesting and I knew what you were going to talk about straight from the beginning. Is there anything besides looking at creativity that makes each society so different from one another. At what point do they agree with each other and is there a way that the Bitchun society can control people like Debra? Is there more to Debra because I felt as though I didn’t learn much about her except for the fact that she represents the new and she has a great desire for whuffie. Overall very organized and focused with good melding between the quotes and words.