ENGL 200 D: Reading Literature: Literature in the Marketplace

I see you claiming that labor is difficult to assign a value to because it is defined differently by each person depending upon his or her role in the system and not necessarily defined by the value of its product which could be assigned a more universally accepted value. Just a note that this took me a while to put together in my mind. I was a bit confused from your paper. How do Collier’s and Smith’s views of the division of labor support your argument? I get the impression that you are contrasting their views, but don’t see a solid argument in your paper. A distraction I saw in a few of your paragraphs is using too many quotations with too few of your own words between them. I think a good ratio is 1:4 for quotations to your own words at the minimum. One question I have is why you think this is an important topic to cover. The answer to this question should probably be somewhere in the introduction paragraph(s). I look forward to seeing where this paper goes. It is an interesting take on this topic.

I felt that your paper needed more focus because I find it hard to link some of your ideas to your main point. I was surprised to see that many quotes used because that left less room for explanation in your paper. I noticed that you ended the sentences usually right after the quote and I feel that you could further explain some of the quotes so that the reader can understand what you are getting out of them. Your main idea should come in more in the writing.

I like your choices of texts. The first two sentences of your introduction are very strong but there isn’t a connection. You are introducing value but then you introduce labor in the second sentence. It would be better to perhaps combine the two.
In the second paragraph, there could be a better way to introduce the male0female relationship like, “These relationship become vital….such as the male-female relationship.”
I think it would beneficial if you sum up the quote rather than have quote then moving on to another idea.
Overall the paper was informative and interesting