ENGL 200 D: Reading Literature: Literature in the Marketplace

I think this is a strong rough draft. You did a great job of making your argument clear and basing your entire paper around it. It’s also really well organized. One thing that could be improved on is in the paragraphs where you use Montagu and Duck, it seems to be more of a description or summary of that part of the poem. The parts you’ve selected are perfect for your argument, but it felt like you could expand on why the the difference between the amount of labor and quality of product exist in this instance and what the significance of that difference.

Overall I really liked your idea and the references you chose fit well with your thesis. You drag out the specific points you want from each paper, and use effective quotations.

There is a little bit of redundancy when you use the first person.

In your third paragraph, you could elaborate a little more on what value each person in the transaction is placing on the labor. For example, say straight out that Dr. S believes that his labor, which consists of wooing Betty, is as valuable as her labor of having sex with him. Betty disagrees and is only willing to take cash for her work.

Your paragraph on Duck was a little confusing: is your point to say that Duck and his landowner disagree on the value of labor because Duck thinks it’s how hard he works, and the landowner thinks it is how much product is produced?

Your essay has an articulated purpose and I can see that through your introduction. From the introduction to the end I can see your question being answered and it flows together. The organization of the paper is written in a concise way and is very clear. One thing that I would suggest is to elaborate more on the Duck’s paragraph because it was a bit unclear on what you were trying to say. You have a great usage of quotes to back up your information.