ENGL 200 D: Reading Literature: Literature in the Marketplace

You have a really interesting topic and you present your ideas really well. However it takes awhile to get to your main ideas. You may look in to being blunter about the purpose and author’s views close to the beginning of your paper. The paper can be expanded by looking into the comparison between the authors. Your paragraphs are really good but it may be beneficial to the reader to add a little bit in order to connect back to the thesis.

Your intro is good at introducing the idea of value with labor but I feel as though you could bring up your main idea faster because the intro was a long explanation. Also you talk about a healthy economy and society along with preserving a healthy supply and demand but why is that important? The idea of supply and demand is a very complicated topic so i was just wondering if you just brought it up to make a bigger impact. I liked how you explained your quotes and gave a kind of summary of each. From reading your essay i understand why defining value is important but you need not go so far as to almost introduce a new topic. Overall very organized.

I think you can add more quotes to support your statements rather than stating, “Smith….” The transitions between each paragraph are smooth and you explain your ideas so that readers can easily understand what you conveying. I think it would be important to very briefly explain what the two types of geniuses are when you introduce them. Also, I think you can expand even further about the geniuses and how the first type of genius would benefit the economy more than the second one.